Monday, October 13, 2014
2013-14 Crimson Chronicle Critique
For the first time, the Crimson Chronicle has received a First Class designation from the National Scholastic Press Association. Read the critique of last year's paper in the shared documents folder in Drive. Write three comments on what you read. Post those comments here.
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The recommendation for features is kind of weird!! "Imaginary friend"??? "Cute stories"??
ReplyDeleteThe critique got the newspaper website WRONG!!
ReplyDeleteThe judge was referring to his or her school paper, which is the Crimson Crier. In another comment, the judge mentions the school Sparkman High. A Google search shows a Sparkman High in Alabama which publishes The Crimson Crier newspaper.
DeleteI noticed there was a lot of emphasis on our punctuation. I especially liked how they pointed out the possesive forms of BOY'S and BOYS'.
ReplyDelete-Estefania
-I think the critic has a point when they stated we need work on the quality of our photos. The photos are sometimes hard to look at.
ReplyDelete-Considering the score they gave us for Coverage & Content I think they really like the stories we cover since we have so much variety.
-Estefania
1. I learned a lot about the newspaper through this critique. There were some things that I did not know were so important to know or worth being recognized. It really showed me how this paper manages to be real when it comes to journalism.
ReplyDelete2. Some of the ideas given by the critique seemed interesting since it would mean that more students give their opinions over some everyday issues or situations teens in school go to. I have seen a lot of those kind of topics in other schools paper too.
3. I think that we should try to find a way of getting more letters to the editor like the critique suggest we do. Overall, I think that this critique is really helpful and specific to strengths and weaknesses
Yes, we need letters. I am planning on asking my English students to submit letters, maybe about Breakfast in the Classroom, or just what they want to see covered in the paper. I will offer them extra credit if their letter gets published. You may want to mention this to your English teacher as well.
DeleteAfter reading the critique what I wanted to comment on was that, when the judge mentioned that we should also focus on story's outside of school, I really feel that we're doing better on that by writing stories such as the hobo story.
ReplyDeleteAlso I feel like she has a point about story art. We rarely have any hand drawn pictures and I feel like those will benefit us. And to allow students outside of journalism to draw some too.
Lastly what really bothered me about her judgment was that she was pinning the paper on grammar mistakes when in the critique itself there were many mistakes.
~ Jocelyne Gutierrez
Overall I did enjoy the responses that we are doing a pretty good job notifying the public on what is going on at Hollywood High. The scores are valid and acceptable since we are a high school not well known by the public.
ReplyDelete-Casey
Maybe we can do club advertisements to showcase all our clubs in the newspaper because I did not know what clubs we have even after club rush. I feel like there is more.
ReplyDelete-Casey
1. I feel like the critic puts too much emphasis on teen health and germs. I get why it is a good idea to write about this but I feel like we have more pressing issues and we should focus more on that. Maybe, when we need to fill up news pages we could use some of these ideas.
ReplyDelete2. The critic also mentions we should interview personnel and staff. While that is a good idea, because as we all know students always have problems with staff, I feel like we must have more opinions of students before we move on to staff.
3. I like the idea of having action shots and quotes. Maybe with this we can appease the football players a little more while still telling the truth. It would also help us fill out the page more.
--Susan C.
Hey, the judge liked some of the headlines.
ReplyDeleteWe need better pictures. Cameras are hard.
Grammar and spelling, that needs to get better.
~_~ S!l@$ ~_~
Silas you are so wise, you are the most awesome human being to ever live!
Delete- The President of the United States of America
The first recommendation we received was that we do not have enough stories whose focus goes outside the teenagers field of interest. We should include stories that focus on topics that impacts more people in a broader level. We can work on this by reviewing articles already published by other Newspapers that affect students indirectly and directly. The New York Times recently publish an article that explains who chooses our lunch food and what are the major companies that want to be a part of our school lunches. Did you know that we spend $105,000,000 on just beef patties alone? Here is a link to the article: http://www.nytimes.com/2014/10/12/magazine/how-school-lunch-became-the-latest-political-battleground.html?_r=0
ReplyDeleteWe can accomplish this by including stories that are about new buildings being built in the Hollywood Area, The reviews do make a good point about using our school's location as a strategic way to include more stories that are more "Hollywood Glamour related". We have already started to accomplish this by going to Jimmy Kimmel shows, and I also encourage our reporters to see if any artists will be performing at the Hollywood Mall.
I love the way USA Today uses graphs to tell the story, i t would be interesting if we also did that to make our Sports stories more relatable by showing graphs of our win to loose ratio to know how well our teams are doing.
We can also try to get Kaiser to sponsor a healthy living section of our newspaper. If this is successful we can use the FAME club and the Wellness Center as our primary lead sources.
The Judge's critique was pretty spot on. I agree that we need more staff/student recognition, and health related stories. "Cute stories"? haha but yeah we need more graphics because afterall, most of us learn best visually.
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DeleteThe judge says that we don't have enough outside stories such as diseases, politics, or any other outside school topics. I will now be more aware of the different worldwide news we can use in the paper, maybe even an ebola section? Also there was a comment on the Sports section saying there was empty space to fill in the paper and that perhaps we could add in a scoreboard to keep students updated, but i was thinking maybe a coach bio could fit in maybe getting a new perspective for the paper. ( I remember reading one from the Cleveland High School paper) The comment on the addition of student input can definetely work out if we talk to our english teachers or any other teacher.
ReplyDelete-Vanessa Centeno
It is very pleasing to know that we went from a second-class rating to a first-class rating, but that does not mean we should stop there. Without a doubt, we should strive for an All-American rating this year!
ReplyDeleteThe critic mentions that we should do more features “about unique students, faculty and staff”, that is definitely what we are trying to incorporate towards the upcoming newspapers. There is a lot of really interesting people at Hollywood High, so undoubtedly we will have more “Met the Sheiks.”
It is true that we need to get more contributions from the Student Body to reassure ourselves that the newspaper is being read and that students, those who are not in Journalism, can use the newspaper as an outlet to express their opinions.
We are still Rookies in layout design, Vanessa Garcia was the mastermind at that, but we are learning as we go along. We have pretty good layout designs so far, yet there is always the necessity of filling space and we have started doing that by putting in score boxes on the sports page, putting fun facts about Hollywood High on the news page, and advertisements.
Personally, I would really like to see a photo essay in one of our issues because they just look like so much fun and it would require us to work on photo captions.
Overall it is safe to say that we did a very good job. The judge mentioned that one of our strengths was we kept consistent. I am glad our paper was cohesive in mentioning things that affect our student body. I agree with the idea of us needing more broad worldly news included in our newspaper. The judge said one of our weaknesses was we did not recognize the unnoticed faculty. I disagree because one of our stories was based on highlighting new faculty people haven't paid attention to, and we gave interesting background of them. For the most part our 'weaknesses' can be quickly fixed.
ReplyDelete-Amaany R.
Great comments and ideas, everyone! What I like about posting on the blog is that we can always go back to it and say, "Yeah, let's do that."
ReplyDeleteIt is a pleasure to read more positive than negative comments and suggestions written for us. I agree that one of the weaknesses (that she addresses), is that our front pages have to address topics that are more student related instead of outside topics. Although we do have staff and student related news, I also encourage her idea of mentioning the staff that we could possibly see everyday in the hallways and don't even say a word to. May be a "thank you for your service" column could possibly be added. Another idea that i liked was her idea about pairing and working together with a teacher in order to encourage students to write letters to the editor as a class. This will sure get some letters in.
ReplyDeleteIt is a pleasure to read more positive than negative comments and suggestions written for us. I agree that one of the weaknesses (that she addresses), is that our front pages have to address topics that are more student related instead of outside topics. Although we do have staff and student related news, I also encourage her idea of mentioning the staff that we could possibly see everyday in the hallways and don't even say a word to. May be a "thank you for your service" column could possibly be added. Another idea that i liked was her idea about pairing and working together with a teacher in order to encourage students to write letters to the editor as a class. This will sure get some letters in.
ReplyDelete"Articles about topics such as fighting germs, dealing national health care, conflicts overseas could be good additions for reminding readers about life in general and about those outside of campus" I like the idea but I like us mostly writing news about school based events more
ReplyDeleteI think we can take better photos or be more creative with the photos we take. An example was when the critique said that "Fellow Sheiks You want to Meet...would have been better with photos of them participating in some of their campus activities."
ReplyDelete"Thanks for offering variations for the front page design. While the banner at the top and bottom have remained consistent, changing the position and size of the feature photo makes the page less monotonous." I also noticed our variations for the front page design and I like that we do that it makes it feel formal but not too much
ReplyDeleteI like how the paper is going so far. I think some stuff, like Athlete of the Month *cough cough*, could be updated or simply done away with unless necessary. Otherwise, all is well.
ReplyDeleteRespond to the comments in the critique, please.
DeleteI am genuinely truly pleased with my school from going second- class rating to five star. I mean its a benefit. Our school news papers continue enhancing and enhancing with numerous types exercises going on. I've recognized that judges said " keep away from inquiry features." I truly like inquiry features. They pull in the peruses consideration effortlessly. Discussing photograph content. That is a huge of a story changers, on the grounds that i see how hard is it to take a decent picture of somebody or something which is truly troublesome for the photographic artists. Sports. the judges said " need to use less words and more numbers." i do concur with them. Since, the entire article is words, you're perusing the article to see who won, who was playing and different viewpoints. At the same time, not to numerous words.
ReplyDelete~Albert Shirtless
I agree with Albert because the rating motivates me to do better in my stories and I am pleased to learn that we have improved so far.
ReplyDeleteI agree with the critique about not writing enough about unique students but I am glad that we did so on the last issue and on the one that is coming up.
I like how many of our weakness are being resolved on the coming issue and on the recent one. It shows how much we are truly improving.
We should include teen/ health issues because it could be useful info for many students.
ReplyDeleteThe graphic quality needs more value and I believe we are improving it this year.
Weak leads should be avoided and I agree we had some bad ones. I hope we grab the attention of readers effectively this year.
-Azniv D.